Sunday, April 6, 2008

Romeo n Juliet

I read the fan-fiction that Ross suggested and it gave me an idea to write this:)
The point for my fan-fiction is 'To find a true love is difficult', based on Romeo and Juliet. All characters from Shakespeares. I wanted to have the feeling of both old-fashioned like a fairy tale and modern style too. For instance, in the movie Romeo(Leonardo Di caprio) and Juliet, it was kind of mixture?, there were some cars, but also some ancient stuffs. So, in the story, I made contrast clearly between writing and conversation.

Once upon a time, there was a young and handsome man by the name of Romeo Montague. Romeo was in love with Juliet… and Beatrice and Desdemona and who knows who else. Romeo loved women more than anything in life, except himself. In fact, Romeo was in love with just about any girl who wore a dress and that was his problem. Beatrice was one of his ladies who loved Romeo. One day, she became suspicious, when her eagle eyes spotted lipstick on Romeo’s collar. She wondered whose soft lips had made such a perfect impression on Romeo’s collar. Beatrice was a very clever girl, some people said perhaps, even a little too clever. She promptly decided to dress up as a man and put on a hat and a false moustache. To find a Romeo, she went out to a pub in a neighbourhood where Romeo frequently attended. It was densely filled with noisy, drunken people. Well timed! With a smile and a manly swagger, she took a seat closer to Romeo. Beside Romeo sat Benedick, Beatrice’s brother. Beatrice was enjoying herself immensely. They began to prattle on all about women and their foibles. As Romeo uttered each complaint Beatrice’s grin grew tighter and revenge, like a small dark fire ignited inside her. Needless to say, Romeo was proud of his gift for speech and he considered it just one of his many weapons to capture the hearts of women.‘Why don’t you get a girl friend, Benedick? I can introduce some of mine. You know I have hundreds of women. They become mine within a day. Easy peezy. I met a new girl last night in a nightclub, and she is damn hot and sexy compared to Desdemona! Desdemona is too gentle, follows me whatever I do, agree with me all the time and it is boring now. My next girl, Juliet, is pretty but she is a bit dumb.’Beatrice’s nails dug forcefully deep into the wooden chair.Romeo continued to brag.‘Another one, Beatrice is interesting girl so I used to have fun with her but she is unkind and weird in some way. You know what? She also had plastic surgery!! If you ask me I reckon she needs still a bit more.’Romeo and Benedick laughed out loud. Just then, Beatrice stood up promptly and get out of the pub as she could bear it no longer. She ground her teeth with vexation and was eager for revenge. The next day, she directly spread a rumour everybody about Romeo that he is a playboy, crazy about women and a braggart. It was circulated real fast. Juliet happened to hear of it, too and couldn’t believe it at first, because she firmly believed him no matter what they say. She thought it was an idle rumour. Nevertheless, it appeared to be true by others’ witness, and constantly kept hearing gossip from surroundings. It was doubtful whether the rumour was true or not. That night, Juliet turned her step toward to Desdemona’s home with a fretful state of mind and was told everything that had happened thoroughly and with great attention to detail. They were good friends and both loved Romeo. The terrible truth about Romeo was almost too much for Juliet to bear. Everything she knew about Romeo was not real, but fake. She started to shed a shower of tears, but soon repressed her tears.
‘A Liar, you broke our faith. You betrayed my trust in you.’
She thought. Desdemona spoke words of cheer while thinking of a big plan and suggested Juliet to act that is… She hesitated for a moment and then…
Few days later, Juliet

Finally my work’s done up to here. I was thinking about revenge but the ending…get married is too boring? Happy ending is just same as others, normal ordinary stories? or break up is what you would not expect or no ending and imagination is responsible for readers to take?? I think I should think about this more..

5 comments:

Ross said...

That's looking really good Ji-eun! loving the simile usage 'eagle eyes' and so forth. Was slightly frustrated when I got to the ending. So options, how about revenge? but in an extremely cunning way. He wakes up one day with an extremely enlarged nose (due to plastic surgery) for example and has to see the rest of his days out alone, and maybe beatrice could confess her love for him with the big nose? symbolic.

Louie said...

I really do like your story Ji-eun!

so now all you need to do is finish it

ideas?

well,

Perhaps you could make it a happy ending? as cliche as they are, they do work well with stories like this, and a happy ending to Romeo and Juliet is exactly opposite of the real story.

On the other hand, if you want to avoid predictability. Perhaps keep the two characters alive, and then perhaps they could enter some adventure together that is totaly off the beaten track, perhaps they become assaasins?... its an idea!

Ji-Eun said...

Thank you Ross and Louie!
Finally its finished now!
I wanted to keep it in romantic way, so revenge plus happy ending!
Here it is

Romeo n Juliet
Once upon a time, there was a young and handsome man by the name of Romeo Montague. Romeo was in love with Juliet… and Beatrice and Desdemona and who knows who else. Romeo loved women more than anything in life, except himself. In fact, Romeo was in love with just about any girl who wore a dress and that was his problem. Beatrice was one of his ladies who loved Romeo. One day, she became suspicious, when her eagle eyes spotted lipstick on Romeo’s collar. She wondered whose soft lips had made such a perfect impression on Romeo’s collar. Beatrice was a very clever girl, some people said perhaps, even a little too clever. She promptly decided to dress up as a man and put on a hat and a false moustache. To find a Romeo, she went out to a pub in a neighbourhood where Romeo frequently attended. It was densely filled with noisy, drunken people. Well timed! With a smile and a manly swagger, she took a seat closer to Romeo. Beside Romeo sat Benedick, Beatrice’s brother. Beatrice was enjoying herself immensely. They began to prattle on all about women and their foibles. As Romeo uttered each complaint Beatrice’s grin grew tighter and revenge, like a small dark fire ignited inside her. Needless to say, Romeo was proud of his gift for speech and he considered it just one of his many weapons to capture the hearts of women.‘Why don’t you get a girl friend, Benedick? I can introduce some of mine. You know I have hundreds of women. They become mine within a day. Easy peezy. I met a new girl last night in a nightclub, and she is damn hot and sexy compared to Desdemona! Desdemona is too gentle, follows me whatever I do, agree with me all the time and it is boring now. My next girl, Juliet, is pretty but she is a bit dumb.’Beatrice’s nails dug forcefully deep into the wooden chair.Romeo continued to brag.‘Another one, Beatrice is interesting girl so I used to have fun with her but she is unkind and weird in some way. You know what? She also had plastic surgery!! If you ask me I reckon she needs still a bit more.’Romeo and Benedick laughed out loud. Just then, Beatrice stood up promptly and get out of the pub as she could bear it no longer. She ground her teeth with vexation and was eager for revenge. The next day, she directly spread a rumour everybody about Romeo that he is a playboy, crazy about women and a braggart. It was circulated real fast. Juliet happened to hear of it, too and couldn’t believe it at first, because she firmly believed him no matter what they say. She thought it was an idle rumour. Nevertheless, it appeared to be true by others’ witness, and constantly kept hearing gossip from surroundings. It was doubtful whether the rumour was true or not. That night, Juliet turned her step toward to Desdemona’s home with a fretful state of mind and was told everything that had happened thoroughly and with great attention to detail. They were good friends and both loved Romeo. The terrible truth about Romeo was almost too much for Juliet to bear. Desdemona's words were long thin
metal pins which pierced Juliet's soft balloon-like heart. Everything she knew about Romeo was not real, but fake. Juliet cried a river of tears. How could this have happened? Wasn't it their destiny to be together. It had seemed that their love was written in the heavens. Benedick found her days later still crumpled at the end of her bed and his heart broke. Benedick, for the first time in his life, saw the effect of what he and Romeo had done so often before.
'Juliet,' he said, 'I'm so sorry. Look what we've done to you. You must be avenged.'
From that day on, whenever Romeo left his house he'd noticed Benedick and Juliet together. At parties, on the lake in a small row boat, Benedick could be seen reading love sonnets dedicated to Juliet's beauty. Slowly, but surely, jealousy, like some green eyed monster, filled Romeo's once callous heart.
'Regret', once a word Romeo had little understanding of, occupied his thoughts until he could do nothing but confront the woman he now realised he loved.
'Juliet, how I have suffered seeing you and my best friend together. Please forgive me. I know it is too late for us, but I wish you all the happiness in the world.'
Juliet's face was carved in stone.
'Do you think I would forgive you just because of one appology? You must be out of your mind.'
Romeo felt a cold crushing weight of his sins and Juliet's scorn.
'I'm sorry..' He managed one more time before turning to leave.
'Wait' said Juliet, 'I'm not finished. What I meant was you have to apologize to every girl whose heart you have broken.'
'Everyone? But...' Romeo began. 'So mean you and Benedick are not really a couple?'
'Of course not' said Juliet.
So Romeo did what he what he had been told. And suffered much scorn and disparagement until at last he made his way back to Juliet's house, a changed man. The spring rains fell on Romeo as he walked up Juliet's path. Juliet went out in the rain with an umbrella. ‘I’m so sorry. Am I too late..?’ asked Romeo.
Juliet smiled. 'Of course not. Look it has rained itself out' she said. She was right and just at that time a huge rainbow appeared in the sky. The lovers hugged each other tightly as they stared towards the clouds. Juliet has been right their love was written in the heavens.

Louie said...

WOOOHHOOOO!!!

Can anyone say 'romantic novelist'' up in here?

I really liked the ending of your story ji-eun!

It encorporates a very romantic ending, yet somehow you didnt make it to cliche, and if a writer can achieve that, they have achieved a great ending.

Well done! :)

Sheikh Saleh said...

You made a nice story...Good on you